A poem . . . what are your comments?

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A poem . . . what are your comments?
Another Time . . . Perhaps

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You and Darbz seem to have something against using commas. More use of pronouns may help. If youre not writing a screen play, drop the....effing dots. I dont like having to do work as I read. Anyway, I just needed someone to smack around for awhile. Thanks. You can get away with reductionism some of the time, but you cant get away with reduction all of the time. Capitalize the first word of every sentence or stanza if you prefer, use the comma when it helps to correct meterbrbrThis weary soul begins to lightenbras the time as burdens ease as verb,bras truths unfold, pains cease,br And are habits for recognition soon forgotten as this specificity love recalled remembers? car companies recall, this is not a good thingbrwill not grow cold shall fire hot and its raging torrent not dim coldbrbrlife itself ...a passage sharedbra dancebrnot to be wastedbrlost would be the essence of life, a dance, a passage. the is the single definite article but you give for essence three articles by way of metaphor, conceptually, this is contradictorybrwere onebrto leave untasted If I were to leave untasted as I am this love, life, passage, dance, essence and I have taste, I am to be tasted or I have yet to tastebrbrdefiant? yes, I stand unafraid to face tomorrow.brFaith renewed I falter not brLife leaves no room for sorrow.brbrhesitation? none!brthere is nothing Ibrwould not dobrnow, later.brWhat matters gives value, satisfies needs isbrall that I am,brI again, give .brbrwords that echo stillbr. . .hold truebrI find I remain boundbrby these . . .brcan not undo